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At 11:00 last night I came up with the idea for this  fanfiction. I am still working on it and need some critical feedback on it. Much appreciated. Stay tuned on Sunday for reviews on Gyspy and The Phantom Tollbooth.

A Look Down From Heaven

An Oklahoma/Little Shop of Horrors Crossover

Notes: Picture if you will It’s A Wonderful Life where George Bailey looks down upon his life but is asked to view it from the perceptive of him not being it. This mirrors that same idea only we replace George Bailey with Jud Fry from Oklahoma & Orin from Little Shop Of Horrors both characters which die at the end of their respective shows. Jud & Laurey’s relationship was never explored very deeply in Oklahoma but I always sort of felt bad for him. I own no Oklahoma or Little Shop characters.

One day up in heaven Jud Fry and Orin Scrivello were playing some poker.

“Hey ya Jud, do you ever think about that girl you were nasty to when you were alive?” Orin asked his friend.

Jud shrugged. “ Not really very often. To her I was mostly a lousy hired hand.”

“What was her name again?”

“Laurey Williams.”

“Do you think she still thinks about you?”

Jud shook his head. “I reckon not. The last time I saw her she was at her wedding and she looked pretty happy. What about you? Do you ever think of that girl you left behind?”

Orin nodded. “Yeah, I really wish I could apologize to her for how I treated her so bad.”

“What was her name anyway? I don’t think you talked about her.”

“Audrey.”

After their poker game they decided to go to the gate keeper and talk to him.

“Mr Gatekeeper sir, we were just wondering if we could have a look back at our lives? We treated two ladies awfully bad when we were alive and we wanted a look back on our lives to see what we could change if we could do things over again.” Orin said

The gatekeeper peered over his glasses at Orin & Jud. “Well, let’s see. Orin, you were eaten by a plant. Died in Upstate New York in 1986 correct?”

Orin nodded

“And you Mr. Fry, you died during a fight succumbing to injuries from falling on your knife in 1902 am I right?”

Jud nodded. “Yes sir, the doctors could not save me.”

“Who would like to go first?”

Jud shrugged.”Why not?”

“Alright,let”s get on with it then”

A sight very familiar to Jud came into his view.

“That’s Aunt Eller’s farm house and there’s Miss Laurey talking to Curly McClain. Gee, I sure couldn’t stand him.”

“Why was that?”Orin asked

“He just bugged me that’s all. He was always trying to impress Laurey. He thought he was better than me when he wasn’t..even that fancy surrey didn’t impres me.”

“Everyone seemed pretty surprised when you asked Laurey to go to the box social with you.”

Jud shrugged. “I guess they didn’t expect much from a hired hand.”

“What did you do in that smokehouse all day Jud?” The gatekeeper asked.

“Just thought of what it’d be like for me & Ms. Laurey to be together. I was really hoping to ask her to marry me & take over the farm for Aunt Eller once she died. Curly stole her away from me though.”

“Did you care what other people thought of you?”

“All of Ms. Laurey’s friends always talked about me behind my back. I didn’t care though. All I cared about was getting her to be with me.’

“Did you ever stop and think that you made her feel uncomfortable and that’s why she didn’t want to go to that dance with you?” The gatekeeper asked.

“Nah.”

“What gave any type of feeling she loved you?” Orin asked curiously.

“That day last winter when I was sick & she brought me some soup to the smokehouse. We sat real quiet for 20 minutes. I reached out and touched her hand.”

“What was her response?”

She looked into my eyes and said.”I hope the soup makes you feel better Jud. She didn’t turn away when I touched her. I don’t think she was scared of my then.”

“After that did she ever come down to the smoke house again?”

“Once but she didn’t stay for long. I don’t think the pictures I had on my wall made her feel too comfortable.”

The three looked down at a scence that was of Laurey asleep in her bed.

“When was this?”

“The girls suggested she get some rest before the Box Social.. I think at that point she was torn up about not going to the dance with Curly.”

A few minutes later the scene unfroze Jud enters the room and shook Laurey awake. “Laurey it’s time to start heading for the party.”

“How did she look then?” Orin asked.

“A little drowsy. I reckon she had a dream with me in it because when I looked  in her eyes she looked mighty scared a me, like I was gonna hurt her.”

“Did you ever ask her about the dream?”

“No, just figured we’d get going to the party. Her dreams ain’t none of my business.”

What do people think so far? Have I captured Jud’s character pretty well? I get into Orin’s character next. Was Little Shop set in the 50s?

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Posted June 25, 2015 by theatretechdiva in Uncategorized

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